[manfan]

I don't know....I'm not sure whether I hit the spot, it seems a little bit confusing to me, even if it was suppose to be poetic.

My main problem is I don't know which is subject, and object. It's a big difference between the two. Like for instance....

溶ける雪
Snow is thawing?
Thawing snow?
Snow can/is able to thaw??

and
踊る雪
Dancing snow?
Snow is dancing?
Dancing on Snow??