[Sakurachan]

That's a really great start! I like the way it's a story which people can view from different points- like, I can see parallels with a lot of extremist regimes, particularly with the division of Vietnam into Norrth and South before the Vietnam War. At the same time, it could simply be a cool-sounding fantasy manga!!

I think perhaps having him descended from a queen or having incredible powers may be slightly clichéed... but then again, it's a popular idea. Perhaps you could alter that to something a little more unexpected? As he was raised by a priest, I personally would want to see the effects of that on him? Perhaps they're the cool fighting type of priests, or even magic using, in which case he could use that along with his good old elfin magic?? Just an idea!

Anyway, I'd buy it ^~ But I agree- get some graphics going- I find the storyline often develops with that, too.