Please help me to read this English sentence:

[Bureda]

You do now.

[YuriTokoro]

Hi.
Would you correct my English, please?

"Japanese Health Insurance

I went to see a dental hygienist today. I go there every three months to get her check and clean my teeth.
I paid the 30 percent of the cost and the Insurance will pay the other 80 percent.
Basically, all the Japanese people must join the Japanese Health Insurance. It’s one of the laws. (However, homeless people don’t.) I pay 30percent of the medical cost when I go to hospitals, clinics, dentists or pharmacies. The percentage depends on what insurance the person joins.
Recently, the number of the people who don’t or can’t join the insurance is increasing because of the economic crisis, while the number of the people who take a sight-seeing tour to foreign countries is increasing about 30 percent. Strange!"

Thank you!

[Koir]

最初の投稿者：YuriTokoro

Hi.
Would you correct my English, please?

"Japanese Health Insurance

I went to see the dental hygienist today. I go there every three months to have her check and clean my teeth.

I pay thirty percent of the cost and my insurance pays the remaining 70 percent.

Under national legislation, all Japanese individuals (except the homeless) must have health insurance. I pay thirty percent of the medical cost when I use health services (hospitals, clinics, dentists) or get prescriptions filled at pharmacies. The percentage paid depends on the individual's insurance plan.

Recently, the number of the people who don’t or can’t pay for insurance is increasing due to the economic crisis. However, the number of Japanese individuals visiting other countries as tourists is increasing by about 30 percent. Strange!"

Thank you!

Hope that helps, Yuri-san!

I'm sure the 30 percent/80 percent was a typo, as those added together are 110 percent . However, I am curious as to why you link the number of people unable to buy health insurance to the rising number of tourists visiting Japan to see the sights. I don't see the connection myself right at the moment, maybe I'm missing something.

[YuriTokoro]

最初の投稿者：Koir

Hope that helps, Yuri-san!
I'm sure the 30 percent/80 percent was a typo, as those added together are 110 percent .

Hi, Koir. Thanks.
Yes, it must have been 70 percent! Thanks!!

However, I am curious as to why you link the number of people unable to buy health insurance to the rising number of tourists visiting Japan to see the sights. I don't see the connection myself right at the moment, maybe I'm missing something.　

I see. I should have thought you would think so.
Japanese people have said that almost all of them are middle-classed for the long time.
It means that we didn’t have the economical gap among people.
I might still believe that being average is normal here. However the gap have been widening recently. It seems to be strange to me.
Does my explanation make sense?

[Koir]

Ack. I had my understanding exactly backwards. I was thinking about tourists coming *into* to Japan to sight-see, not Japanese people visiting other countries. In that case, I do see your point: how can people not afford insurance but still have money to go to other countries?

I'll have to revise my revisions. Apologies

[YuriTokoro]

最初の投稿者：Koir

Ack. I had my understanding exactly backwards. I was thinking about tourists coming *into* to Japan to sight-see, not Japanese people visiting other countries. In that case, I do see your point: how can people not afford insurance but still have money to go to other countries?

Just now, I understood that I’ve believed the Japanese people must be average. I simply thought that this was the way things are. I realized it just now.
My point could be: There are people who cannot afford insurance while there are people who have money to go to other countries.
However, I understand now that you wouldn’t think it’s strange.

I'll have to revise my revisions. Apologies

Sorry. I should have been more careful.

Recently, the number of the people who don’t or can’t pay for insurance is increasing due to the economic crisis. However, the number of Japanese individuals visiting other countries as tourists is increasing by about 30 percent. Strange!"

Thank you for revising.
Do you think I should explain the backwards in the composition?

[Koir]

最初の投稿者：YuriTokoro

Thank you for revising.
Do you think I should explain the backwards in the composition?

I don't think it's necessary. It was my mistake in reading that led to my getting it exactly backwards from the idea you were communicating.

[YuriTokoro]

最初の投稿者：Koir

I don't think it's necessary. It was my mistake in reading that led to my getting it exactly backwards from the idea you were communicating.

Thanks, Koir.
Your posts are very, very instructive as always.
I will write about my wrong impression for my blog someday.

[YuriTokoro]

How about this? I changed the last part.

"Japanese Health Insurance

I went to see the dental hygienist today. I go there every three months to have her check and clean my teeth.
I pay thirty percent of the cost and my insurance pays the remaining 70 percent.
Under national legislation, all Japanese individuals (except the homeless) must have health insurance. I pay thirty percent of the medical cost when I use health services (hospitals, clinics, dentists) or get prescriptions filled at pharmacies. The percentage paid depends on the individual's insurance plan.
Recently, the number of the people who don’t or can’t pay for insurance is increasing due to the economic crisis. However, the number of Japanese individuals visiting other countries as tourists is increasing by about 30 percent. Japan didn’t have this gap among people before.”


Thank you!

[Koir]

Excellent. It presents two observations that at first glance do not appear to have a connection, then gives the reason in a following sentence that puts the concepts before it into the proper perspective.

Good work, Yuri-san!