Check my English again, please!

Sakusakusakura · (#1 (**permalink**))

Hi, everyone!

I need you to check my English, please.

日本語：さらに、もしよければ日本留学のお手伝いもしますよ。
English: In addition we will help you studying abroad in Japan if you like.

Thank you,

Ashida · (#2 (**permalink**))

English: In addition, we will help you to study abroad in Japan, if you would like.

Japanese: さらに、私たちは、もしあなたが日本で留学したいのであれば、手助けします。　

Sakusakusakura · (#3 (**permalink**))

Ashida-san

Thank you very much!

MMM · (#4 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by Sakusakusakura

Hi, everyone!

I need you to check my English, please.

日本語：さらに、もしよければ日本留学のお手伝いもしますよ。
English: In addition we will help you studying abroad in Japan if you like.

Thank you,

In what context will this be used?

I would probably say:

Also, if you like we can help you study abroad in Japan.

masaegu · (#5 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by Ashida

　Japanese: さらに、私たちは、もしあなたが日本で留学したいのであれば、手助けします。　

lol Trying to correct the Japanese sentence written by a Japanese-speaker?

Where have you ever heard あなた used that way?

Ashida · (#6 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by Sakusakusakura

Ashida-san

Thank you very much!

You are very welcome.

Ashida · (#7 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by masaegu

lol Trying to correct the Japanese sentence written by a Japanese-speaker?

Where have you ever heard あなた used that way?

Then maybe you should try to translate it better.

MMM · (#8 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by Ashida

Then maybe you should try to translate it better.

Why would a perfectly good sentence in Japanese written by a native speaker need to be touched? That's not what the OP was asking for.

Sakusakusakura · (#9 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by MMM

In what context will this be used?

I would probably say:

Also, if you like we can help you study abroad in Japan.

MMM san

Thank you very much for your reply.

I like the sentence you wrote but is it more casual than previous one?
I think both of them are grammtically correct.

I know it made you confused because I wrote just one sentence.
But if I wrote whole content it should be too long and I don't want to bother you...

Anyway I appreciate your help.

Thank you!

Ashida · (#10 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by MMM

Why would a perfectly good sentence in Japanese written by a native speaker need to be touched? That's not what the OP was asking for.

Because the OP asked for corrections. Therefore, corrections were made in English and Japanese.