My 1st manga page(online)

[chibiloli93]

Originally Posted by thedarklord

I love them! Great job!

And I agree with the others that the wings could be longer but I still love the art and the story definitely sounds like something I would read.

Thank u so much!

[HaloNeko]

It's really good even if I can't read the top of the page.

[chibiloli93]

Originally Posted by HaloNeko

It's really good even if I can't read the top of the page.

sowy bout dat...T.T it wuz my 1st time using a scanner...

[chibiloli93]

Okay, this is how da color pic looks so far... wat do u guys think?Loves wings titlep1edited.jpg

[ThuMpeR]

It looks great. I really like the face on the left, it's done rather well. Splendid job

[thedarklord]

Cool! I love the face on the left and the way she is sitting.

[chibiloli93]

Thank u! U guys r so nice!

[Powermad147]

My presence on this thread was requested, so here I am (I never turn down requests XD). Hmmm...Looking over these pagfes, they're quite nice...Can't think of too much to critique (other than maybe to center it a bit better...I can't read some of the bubbles that are cut off XD) Hmmm...The only problem i can think of is that the story sounds like I've heard it before, but the artwork is very good (reminds me of Clamp) and so far, aside from being familiar, the intro is grabbing, as in I want to know more. Well...That's all I got >.>

Oh! And btw, now I know why the title page looked familiar as well...It's similar to a scene in the intro of "Hanbun No Tsuki Ga Noboru Sora". Here is a screen of it:



Asleep on the throne...But who's throne is it? This girl in the screenshot is supposed to be in the hospital 0_o

[auran]

10all the way

[chibiloli93]

Originally Posted by Powermad147

My presence on this thread was requested, so here I am (I never turn down requests XD). Hmmm...Looking over these pagfes, they're quite nice...Can't think of too much to critique (other than maybe to center it a bit better...I can't read some of the bubbles that are cut off XD) Hmmm...The only problem i can think of is that the story sounds like I've heard it before, but the artwork is very good (reminds me of Clamp) and so far, aside from being familiar, the intro is grabbing, as in I want to know more. Well...That's all I got >.>

Oh! And btw, now I know why the title page looked familiar as well...It's similar to a scene in the intro of "Hanbun No Tsuki Ga Noboru Sora". Here is a screen of it:



Asleep on the throne...But who's throne is it? This girl in the screenshot is supposed to be in the hospital 0_o

Oh i c wat u mean...Oh & the bubbles got cut off b/c it wuz da 1st picture i ever scanned...Thank u for ur comments & tips...i wuz kinda thinkin of changin' my drawing style....(again) I change it a lot...When she says she doesnt like 2 b a goddess b/c she feels used its b/c people only care 4 her b/c of her powers...so dey treat her like an unwilling queen(explination 4 why she's tied down on da throne...)