My Manga " White Day"

Kyousuke · (#1 (**permalink**))

im starting to draw my zombie manga "White Day" and i wanted to get some opinions on some things. i made a pilot page to kinda show the manga. its incomplete and still being worked out. the second is a picture of one of the main characters , kenneth of the A.P.D. . he joins the group of our main character and helps out a great deal. again i just wanted to get some opnions about it and what would be interesting to see in the Manga.

chaseme · (#2 (**permalink**))

kinda like resident evil?
well i think you need to improve your panels a bit, it doesnt seem to have a "flow" in the actions anyway its just my own opinion. It just your pilot page so i cant really tell what i think about your upcoming manga ^^,

Kyousuke · (#3 (**permalink**))

ya i felt the same way. the panel layout really bugged me. especially the little one which i dont think needs to be their. but its not going to be like resident evil. A.P.D. is the police department he is front. it stands for Avery Police Department. thnx for that though. i can change some things around.

Shiningmonkey · (#4 (**permalink**))

Yeah, the layout needs a little work but once that's done, it looks to be sweet. Good job. I always like the name White Day.

chaseme · (#5 (**permalink**))

well the small panel is ok
i think the big panel in the bottom is the lacking one
you could further divide it
as i can see it there is 3 significant event/action on that panel that you try to squeeze into one
1. corpse chaotic background
2. the biting
3. the facial expressions of the guy bitten
just my opinion feel free to correct me