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Hisuwashi 04-29-2008 10:31 PM

被拘留的爱 [Detained Love]
 
I remember a few older JF members really liked this poem, and most of my friends said it was their favourite poem by me. So for the benefit of newer members who haven't seen it, I'm posting it here, Chinese and English versions. Hope you enjoy it!! Please comment :D

被拘留的爱

我的爱仍然是一个被俘的宝石
一线希望,一个被珍爱的工具
白热天空的启迪
在您的眼睛里闪烁着美丽的星星

我的爱是伪造在一个坚牢的信赖的模具里
但腐败与恐惧损耗你的渴望
你的温暖由这火葬用的柴堆给与
所以是你的梦想,您想要的希望

你安心的悄悄的走,因为你的心知道
我的眼睛永远看着你的喜悦
向往你身体各处的敏感
将你包裹在安全,舒适和关心里

这个情人是你是现在也是永远
感受你的心,信任你的心和珍爱你的心
我永远不会认为是很残忍的
去超越你的心和埋葬这宝石


Detained Love

My love remains a captured jewel
A glimmer of hope, a treasured tool
The enlightenment of the incandescent sky
The beauty of the stars in your eye

My love is forged in a strong mould of trust
But corrupt with fear for loss of your lust
Your warmth is empowered by this pyre
So are your dreams, your hope with desire

Securely you glide, because your heart knows
My eyes are forever watching your glow
Yearning your body's tenderness here and there
Wrapping you in safety, comfort and care

This flame is yours for now and forever
To feel in your heart, to trust and to treasure
Never will I think of being so cruel
To surpass your heart and bury this jewel

Kanji_The_Wanderer 04-30-2008 02:24 PM

Hey Hisu-kun, that is very well done. I have never read any poem written by you before. I find that fact rather sad now since you have made a really nice one here.

Personally, I didn't know you wrote poems at all, but from what is displayed here they are rather good. So Congrats.

PS> I really enjoy your well expressed detail.

Fisher 04-30-2008 02:33 PM

Unbelievable!!
 
这首诗是你写的吗?真的很棒。
很难想像一个外国人能有如此的文笔。

swords 04-30-2008 03:13 PM



很好很强大
too good,too strong

Hisuwashi 04-30-2008 09:06 PM

Thank you everyone, :D

Kanji, ah actually I guess not many JF members have seen it (so far ^^;) Thanks very much for the comment. :)

Rikku777 05-02-2008 02:54 AM

*ruffles hair* Hisu you rawwwk!!! I dun remember reading this one though...>_> But then again, you do know me very well...*points to hair* I may have forgotten^^ Anyway, its amazing, you are amazing and you should post more...*pulls out gun* NOW.....J/K!!!:D :rheart: *hugs*

Hisuwashi 05-04-2008 12:50 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rikku777 (Post 479942)
*ruffles hair* Hisu you rawwwk!!! I dun remember reading this one though...>_> But then again, you do know me very well...*points to hair* I may have forgotten^^ Anyway, its amazing, you are amazing and you should post more...*pulls out gun* NOW.....J/K!!!:D :rheart: *hugs*

Nya, thank you so much hun, you're much greater of course though *hugs back* :p :rheart: Maybe I will... I'll think about it :D

P.S. I didn't do the Chinese version, it was translated by my friend BUT I was very pleased with the result. xD ^^

Hisuwashi 05-05-2008 12:10 PM

OK then... I'll put another here...

Like White Horses of the Sea

Like white horses of the sea,
Smothered under waves that die
Reminiscent of the evening sky
but, how vast can something be!
Like all the feelings you stole from me
A sun defeated by your shrine,
Crawling behind horizon's line
The night that dwindles still not dark,
The moon's beauty just a mark
All power ceased, all sorrow faint,
All is nothing, your beauty quaint.
Your memory wrapped within my smile,
Like we're embracing for a while
And in the sunset heaven lies,
All in my arms in pretty disguise
These memories treasure like some jewel,
Not hard to love you, not some fool.
Still grasping passion, won't let go
this love I cherish is all I know.


^.^

lulu 05-05-2008 05:48 PM

Welp... Both of them are LOVELY!!!!! You have a true talent!

Hisuwashi 05-05-2008 06:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by lulu (Post 482291)
Welp... Both of them are LOVELY!!!!! You have a true talent!

Thank you dear sis ^^ :D


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