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Hisuwashi 05-23-2007 11:06 PM

Amazing story Mu!!!!!! Can't wait for the next bit! Sounds like it will be interesting...

musashi 05-23-2007 11:08 PM

I'd add more, but i am kinda busy with------*distracted*

Hisuwashi 05-24-2007 12:43 AM

with my poem?

cattiemae 06-08-2007 07:04 AM

Cattieee.
 
Aww, that's a really good story. I usually don't like short stories but I read the ending and decided to read the whole thing. The ending was beautiful, but I thought when they confessed to each other was laying it a bit thick.
I don't know, maybe people like that. It's a bit mushy for me. Haha, either way it's great! The ending was wonderful! You only had one spelling mistake too! On a lot of stories, I give up reading because of the atrocious spelling. Anyway it's:

" I looked at him still starring at the twinkling stars above. After a long pause, I answered. "

It's: staring.

You might have accidentally clicked r twice when typing? I find that happens a lot. Anyway, great stoy! Looking forward if you add more.

musashi 06-09-2007 06:31 PM

YEAH! I'm glad you like it......

I'm pretty good with spelling, except when it comes to "starring" and "staring"....lol....so, congragulations, you've found my weakness! lol! But yeah, i'm glad you like it and i feel honored that you read it....since you said you don't like to read it. I also appreciate your opinion. I like opinions, good or bad, because they help me become a better writer. Thanks again!


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