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02-02-2007, 10:02 PM

They are all VERY VERY GOOD. And if u ask me the third one sounds like someone who would be ur protector or lover but they can basically be the same thing can't they


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"My Shadow" written 10/13/06

Held in captivity
Attached to a world I hate
Trying desperately to get away
But I can't run from my fate
Forced to be my own shadow
I want to break away
Forced to stand beside myself
When I just don't want to stay
The only time I'm a little free
Is in the dark at night
Drowning in the numbness
Until the sun brings light
Then I'm just a shadow once more
Forced to fall behind Her fascade
Crying desperately to let me go
Praying to an unanswering god
All the pain I felt before
Was nothing compared to this
It seems as though I've been chosen
To endure a soul-stealing kiss
Trying to walk the other way
But She always holds on
Til one day when She's all that's me
And I am all that's gone
She is my body; my reality
And I am Her shadow
Forever following her steps
She'll never let me go
She smiles and laughs
When I need to cry
She goes on living
When I need to die
Blinded by the fear of our loss
She just couldn't stand it
Stricken by the reality of their lies
She just didn't understand it
So She seperated herself
From all that was me
She made me into Her shadow
So She could forget who She used to be
But now I'm held in chains
Stuck in a world I hate
Lurking in the darkness
Unable to escape my fate


Good? Bad? Yes? No?


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Smile 02-02-2007, 10:08 PM

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They are all VERY VERY GOOD. And if u ask me the third one sounds like someone who would be ur protector or lover but they can basically be the same thing can't they
Thanks a lot! I've never really shown anyone my poems. Understand, though, that most of these poems are just POEMS. They may or may not reflect myself. It's just...writing somber, dreary, and strangely sad poems comes natural to me. *shiver* quite a few of my poems feature a young male who commits suicide. When I think of him, the name Kevin or Ben always come to my mind. Maybe he is a ghost who is haunting me. Who knows??


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02-02-2007, 10:10 PM

It's awesome...man I wish I could right poems like that! I give it 2 thumbs up.


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02-02-2007, 10:11 PM

Maybe you should tell your story on, "A Haunting?' lol anyway, I think your poems are great and I like depressing ones because....well I don't know why!
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02-02-2007, 10:13 PM

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Thanks a lot! I've never really shown anyone my poems. Understand, though, that most of these poems are just POEMS. They may or may not reflect myself. It's just...writing somber, dreary, and strangely sad poems comes natural to me. *shiver* quite a few of my poems feature a young male who commits suicide. When I think of him, the name Kevin or Ben always come to my mind. Maybe he is a ghost who is haunting me. Who knows??
Well if u ask me the poems that are sad seem more real compared to the poems that are all happy. And if ur being hunted by a ghost I feel that it would be awesome if the ghost was nice


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Thanks!!!! - 02-02-2007, 10:27 PM

My mom always used to tell me my poems were horrible because they were so depressing. She even burned a notebook I had once when I was 8 and 1/2. Believe it or not, in a way this poem is for my mom....anyway...here it is:

Roses, Love, And Smiles written 8/8/06
I can see it in your eyes
Everytime I look, I see
I know it deep inside my soul
That you feel nothing for me
All the things I do for you
That you'll never realize
All the blood I spill because
Of all your hurtful lies
Yet, sometimes still, I believe
That maybe you really care
But then when I need you most
You are never there
Roses, love, and smiles
The things I imagine for us
But my pain and scars
Are the only things I trust
Sometimes deep into the night
When your face crosses my mind
I wish I had the happiness
I know I'll never find


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02-02-2007, 10:31 PM

That poem reminds me of my dad.


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02-02-2007, 10:35 PM

Hmmm. My parents are supportive of anything I do, can't really relate. My mom does not like manga or fantasy though, so that is a bummer... Very good poem though.
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Smile 02-02-2007, 10:46 PM

Thanks everyone! No more poems for today, though...I'll post more when......well, if not tomorrow or sunday then DEFINETELY on monday. I promise!


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