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Originally Posted by girlgamer1984

A young girl, was lying on the bed with her eyes closed. You could clearly see, the cat like whiskers, and a tiny black nose drawn on her face. Her forehead was painted with a Chinese character. The corner of her lips, were covered with food, as if she had been senselessly eating up until now. She had dozed off on the bed, surrounded by four, abandoned, empty bottles.

Why did you use so many commas in the first two sentences?
Anywho, the sentence "Her forehead was painted with a Chinese character" would sound a lot better like this: "There was a Chinese character painted on her forehead", since you can not paint with a written symbol, now can you?
"The corner of her lips, were covered with food" mismatching singular/plural form (also i do not see the point of using comma in this sentence). So it should look like this: "The corners of her lips were covered with food" (I do not know if both the corners are dirty, or just one, since i do not see the picture).
I would also rewrite the last sentence, since it is not too euphonic.