[LiXiQing]

I'm a little ashamed of it, because I'm afraid it may be taken the wrong way, but plz read it and answer a few questions I put.

赤い太陽は
神風方向です。
呆気ない酒。

1.) Can it be regarded as a verse? If not help me plz to make it right.
2.) It looks like nonsense, doesn't it? If does what should be done to make sense of it.

What I was trying to write:

The Red Sun is
Kamikadze's destination (heading, course)
Sake is runnig too short (not enough)

It's a kind of mockery of Asuka Soryu who is compared with the Red Sun and anyone who wants to move closer to her should be regarded as a suicide hero. It's always hard to make the last step. If there would be a little more wine in a cup, it made it easier to decide.

P.S. And one thing more. Did I write right the phrase: 私が赤毛をどうして知りましたか? - How did you guess I am a redhead?

I'm very sorry if I said something wrong or abusing.