Please help me to read this English sentence:

[YuriTokoro]

Hi.
Could you correct my English?

"Guin Saga Vol.128"

This is the latest volume of Guin Saga, entitled “Secrets behind the Sacred Shrine”.
Yona (the kingdom Parros’s the chief of staff) went to Yaga, which is a holy land of a religion called Miroku, in order to investigate the religious community in secret. He finds that the people are brainwashed as if they are on wires there. A magus who is protecting Yona is burned in a magic fire. The community is enforcing a low banning people who once enter Yaga going out of the town.

I really want to know the future of Istavan’s sons! I think I need to wait about 100 volumes, but there isn’t any information about the author’s taking over. (The author, Kaoru Kurimoto, died in May.) Istavan has two sons. (He has never seen one of them.) I’m dying to know whether they will be opposed each other!

Thank you.

[ANegative]

Originally Posted by YuriTokoro

Hi.
Could you correct my English?

"Guin Saga Vol.128"

This is the latest volume of Guin Saga, entitled “Secrets behind the Sacred Shrine”.
Yona (the kingdom Parros’s chief of staff) went to Yaga, which is a holy land of a religion called Miroku, in order to investigate the religious community in secret. He finds that the people are brainwashed as if they are on wires there. A magus who is protecting Yona is burned in a magic fire. The community is enforcing a low banning people who once enter Yaga going out of the town.

I really want to know the future of Istavan’s sons! I think I need to wait about 100 volumes, but there isn’t any information about the author’s taking over. (The author, Kaoru Kurimoto, died in May.) Istavan has two sons. (He has never seen one of them.) I’m dying to know whether they will be opposed each other!

Thank you.

You made one or two mistakes. Pretty good.

"Guin Saga Vol.128"

This is the latest volume of Guin Saga, entitled “Secrets Behind the Sacred Shrine”.
Yona (chief of staff of the kingdom of Parros) went to Yaga, which is a holy land of a religion called Miroku, in order to investigate the religious community in secret. He finds that the people are brainwashed as if they were puppets on a string. A Magus who is protecting Yona is burned in a magic fire. The community is enforcing a law, banning people from leaving Yaga once entered.

[Koir]

Originally Posted by YuriTokoro

Hi.
Could you correct my English?

"Guin Saga Vol.128"

This is the latest volume of Guin Saga, entitled “Secrets behind the Sacred Shrine”.
Chief of Staff Yona of the Parros kingdom travels to Yaga, the holy land of the Miroku religion. He is secretly investigating the religious community. Yona discovers the people of Yaga are brainwashed as though they are puppets on wires. The magus assigned to protecting Yona is burned in a magic fire. To make matters worse, the community is enforcing a law making it illegal to leave Yaga once they enter.

I really want to know the future of Istavan’s sons! I think I need to wait about 100 volumes, but there isn’t any information about the new author continuing the series. (The original author, Kaoru Kurimoto, died in May.) Istavan has two sons: he has never seen one of them. I’m dying to know whether they are opposites to each other!

Thank you.

" 'Relax,' said the night man. 'We are programmed to receive. You can check out any time you like, but you can never leave.' "

-- The Eagles, "Hotel California"

Yaga's laws as stated in your post reminded me of that old Eagles song, Yuri. That city doesn't seem to be a very safe place for outsiders...

As for the post composition, only some revisions were made to place sentence elements and concepts in slightly different order to make it read more naturally. I made a guess that "people on wires" meant they were being controlled as though they were puppets with no thoughts of their own. If that is incorrect, please change it to the correct expression.

Also, the part about Istavan's sons was changed slightly. The part where you wonder if the two sons are opposites was changed to better show that the sons are being compared. In this case, the number of items are only two, so "each other" is the proper expression. "Each" is a singular-form word, and "other" can be used in multiple items, but in this case it is modified by "each" to show that the items being compared are singular and not groups.

Good work, Yuri!

[YuriTokoro]

Originally Posted by ANegative

You made one or two mistakes. Pretty good.

"Guin Saga Vol.128"

This is the latest volume of Guin Saga, entitled “Secrets Behind the Sacred Shrine”.
Yona (chief of staff of the kingdom of Parros) went to Yaga, which is a holy land of a religion called Miroku, in order to investigate the religious community in secret. He finds that the people are brainwashed as if they were puppets on a string. A Magus who is protecting Yona is burned in a magic fire. The community is enforcing a law, banning people from leaving Yaga once entered.

Thank you, ANegative.
"Chief of staff of the kingdom of Parros", "puppets on a string" and "a law, banning people from leaving Yaga once entered".
Thank you for telling the correct expressions.

[YuriTokoro]

Originally Posted by Koir

" 'Relax,' said the night man. 'We are programmed to receive. You can check out any time you like, but you can never leave.' "

-- The Eagles, "Hotel California"

Yaga's laws as stated in your post reminded me of that old Eagles song, Yuri. That city doesn't seem to be a very safe place for outsiders...

Hi, Koir.
I didn’t notice the similarity between Hotel California and Yaga. Yes, you are right. Both of them are scary, and people can’t leave it.

As for the post composition, only some revisions were made to place sentence elements and concepts in slightly different order to make it read more naturally. I made a guess that "people on wires" meant they were being controlled as though they were puppets with no thoughts of their own. If that is incorrect, please change it to the correct expression.

I wrote what an internet dictionary says, but that was not enough again.
I meant that people were being controlled as though they were puppets with no thoughts of their own. Thank you for understanding.

Also, the part about Istavan's sons was changed slightly. The part where you wonder if the two sons are opposites was changed to better show that the sons are being compared. In this case, the number of items are only two, so "each other" is the proper expression. "Each" is a singular-form word, and "other" can be used in multiple items, but in this case it is modified by "each" to show that the items being compared are singular and not groups.

Their names are Durian and Istavan II. Durian will be a king of Mongaul, while Istavan II will be a king of Ghola. I think they will be foes and have wars.
What should I say? I thought that was “oppose”.
Anyway, I should have written more details.

Thanks as always, Koir.

[snbzk]

Originally Posted by YuriTokoro

Their names are Durian and Istavan II. Durian will be a king of Mongaul, while Istavan II will be a king of Ghola. I think they will be foes and have wars.
What should I say? I thought that was “oppose”.
Anyway, I should have written more details.

Reminds me of the movie 乱.

I think that, despite the misunderstanding, "whether they will be opposed to each other" would be okay, but "whether they will oppose each other" would be more appropriate. The difference is that "oppose" describes an action, whereas "be opposed to" generally describes someone's opinion. If you're opposed to something (an idea or course of action) you might not actually do anything about it other than say so.
Giving more details would also have made it clearer.

[YuriTokoro]

Originally Posted by snbzk

Reminds me of the movie 乱.

Hi, snbzk. Thank you.

I think that, despite the misunderstanding, "whether they will be opposed to each other" would be okay, but "whether they will oppose each other" would be more appropriate. The difference is that "oppose" describes an action, whereas "be opposed to" generally describes someone's opinion. If you're opposed to something (an idea or course of action) you might not actually do anything about it other than say so.

I didn’t know “be opposed to” generally describes someone’s opinion.
I should have written “they will be foes and have wars between their countries”.

Giving more details would also have made it clearer.

The difficulty is that I can’t say everything when I tell the amusingness of the story.
The book (Guin Saga Vol.128) has not been translated into English yet. Some people might be looking forward to reading it. I don’t want to ruin their fun.

Thank you again, snbzk.

[Koir]

Originally Posted by YuriTokoro

Their names are Durian and Istavan II. Durian will be a king of Mongaul, while Istavan II will be a king of Ghola. I think they will be foes and have wars.
What should I say? I thought that was “oppose”.
Anyway, I should have written more details.

Ah, now I understand better. As it was written, I believed it was just to compare the personalities of the sons. If it is possible in future stories that they will go to war with each other, the sentence as I revised it is incorrect.

Suggested new revision:

"I’m dying to know if they will lead their countries to war with each other in the future!"

[YuriTokoro]

Originally Posted by Koir

Ah, now I understand better. As it was written, I believed it was just to compare the personalities of the sons. If it is possible in future stories that they will go to war with each other, the sentence as I revised it is incorrect.

Suggested new revision:

"I’m dying to know if they will lead their countries to war with each other in the future!"

Koir! Thanks!!
Thant's what I wanted to say! Perfect!
“Lead their countries to war with each other”. This is what I meant. I should have written like this.
Thanks a lot, Koir!

[YuriTokoro]

Hi.
Could you correct my English?

"Roten"

Last night I went to a summer festival in a shrine. There were many roten and yatai, which are small mobile shops.
Yatai generally means a small mobile shop including roten. However, when we say yatai, we think of shops selling food, and when we say roten, we think of shops of toys, willow baskets, goldfish scooping or ring toss. The picture is a roten of shooting game.
In many cases, according to rumor, yatai and roten are affiliated by some gangs. The people selling things at yatai are rated, and the higher people in the rate are supposed to cook food which is complex to make like “okonomiyaki” and “yakisoba”. The lower people are supposed to cook simple food like baked corns. (You know, baked corns only need to be baked.) The highest people aren’t supposed to sell anything, and are supposed to patrol and prevent fittings. (Nobody would start fighting knowing the scary people are walking around.)
That's only a rumor.

Thank you.
Yatai - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Okonomiyaki - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Yakisoba - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
http://www.kikkoman.co.jp/homecook/s...?numb=00001876 = baked corns