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Acidreptile 07-02-2007 10:41 PM

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Originally Posted by lpdirufangirl09 (Post 167413)
yeah, for a little while that's all i could write about. i'm trying to expand my writing horizons. any suggestions?

Well you could try using the things around you for inspiration,and interpret them in your particular way.

Excessum 07-02-2007 10:46 PM

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Originally Posted by Acidreptile (Post 167438)
Well you could try using the things around you for inspiration,and interpret them in your particular way.

add a bit of irony and sarcasm to make them fun to read, though do not exaggerate to keep the seriousness...

XjapanFOREVER 07-03-2007 04:36 AM

Umm.... you could also so use a complex rhyme scheme... such as a certain amount of syllables per line, with each line rhyming!. All poems don't have to rhyme, but the ones that rhyme are more memorable! Take this one I wrote for an example!...

The lies, the truth.
Deceit, the proof.
Deceived by you.
Stolen, my youth.
Was I the fool,
For loving you?
What should I do?
Abandon you?
Try to pull through?
Shed tears for you?
I thought you knew
That I loved you.
I feel so used.
Also confused.
My heart's imbued
A crimson hue.
I must renew.
I must pursue
For the debut
of me, post-you!

lollijenn 07-03-2007 05:10 AM

aww its beautiful love.. i havent finished them .. no... but i will!

lpdirufangirl09 07-03-2007 05:13 AM

haha. thanx jenn. i'm working on writing more but my inspiration is at an all time low. ><

lollijenn 07-03-2007 05:16 AM

it happens

and btw


reita NEVER dies

lpdirufangirl09 07-03-2007 05:19 AM

haha yeah i know >< but, hell, whatever floats their boat. o.0 'Lost' was actually inspired my the Kodou pv =p

John 07-16-2007 04:08 AM

wow i really like what you wrote.

and maybe i got an idea

how about you try writing some songs or something.
cause they are poems just with a different set up
maybe you'll get inspired or something. idk just an idea

maybe ill post some of my songs up on here.

lpdirufangirl09 07-16-2007 04:33 AM

heya no aka_______________________
here, take a sip.
sit and talk a while.
as our laughter lingers
across your drunken smile.
you're mine now.

i'll take your hand in mine
and look into your eyes.
build up a little trust.
tell a few white lies.
you're mine now.

press your lips against mine.
let's see whats up these stairs.
use this bandana to hide your eyes.
there's a surprise up here
you're mine now.

several moments pass.
you're lying on the floor.
gasping to catch your breath.
i'm glad a locked the door.
you're mine now.

do you like how i painted the room?
it's my favorite color, red.
i think it just screams 'you'.
too bad you're dead.
you're mine now.

i get to keep you forever.
a pretty memory in my head.
i see you everywhere.
you surround me as i lie in bed.
you're mine now.

lpdirufangirl09 07-18-2007 07:35 PM

we are worlds apart.
perfect strangers to each.
i feel something from you.
but you're too far to reach.
as you walk beneath the moon,
my sun is beaming, bright as can be.
i see you when i dream.
do you ever think of me?


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