Hi, Koir. Thanks as always!
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Originally Posted by Koir
My aunt told me that the assistant liked my aunt. The assistant said that her mother was much like me.
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This sounds like the assistant’s mother was much like me(Yuri).
Can I write it “The assistant said that her mother was much like my aunt.”?
I didn’t go with my aunt or see the shop assistant. Doesn’t “The assistant said that …..” sounds like I saw the assistant?
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I can understand the assistant's point of view. From looking at the two of you, she came to the conclusion that your aunt, being older, is most likely a mother or at least deserving of the status we should give to older people in society. As your post stated, it's hard to overcome the ideas one has grown up with and held true for decades. It's possible, but never a complete process.
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Should I write the fact that I didn’t go with her?
My aunt told me the story after she came back to Japan.
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As for the post composition itself, I see a lot of improvement and increased skill in writing English naturally. There are some sentences that go on too long that need to separated into two or more sentences depending on the flow of words and ideas.
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The flow of words is difficult to me. I will see to avoid too long sentences.
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The one problem I have with the post is with the quote from your aunt. It's confusing in tone, and the way it's written makes it appear that you are paraphrasing what your aunt said instead of what she actually did say. As a result, it's confusing and not immediately obvious where I should put the quote marks or change the text itself.
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I considered indirect discourse, but “My aunt told me that the assistant liked my aunt, the assistant said to my aunt that the assistant’s mother was much alike my aunt, and the assistant wanted to exchange letters with my aunt, but my aunt didn’t like the assistant because the assistant called my aunt ‘Mama-san’ many times. My aunt felt as if she was a bar hostess.”
For one thing, I wasn’t with her when she met the assistant.
Thanks, again, Koir!