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10-11-2010, 10:00 AM

Just thought I'd further pick up on a few points I feel Koir missed.

Line 1 - 'This is what I dreamt in the past week' should perhaps be 'This is what I had dreamt in the past week'.

Line 2 - 'I bought a lot of herrings in my dream' should maybe be 'I had bought a lot of herrings in my dream'.

Line 4 - I feel you were right to say the 'fish would go rotten'. You could alternatively use 'the fish would become rotten'. Or 'the fish would rot' can also work in there.

Line 5 - I believe the phrase is 'putting off tasks', not 'pulling off...'

I think that just about covers it


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